tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1642227365038026218.post5323943188420220845..comments2015-04-23T19:35:08.201-07:00Comments on Deep Breath: Not BrokenAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00154498473270334754noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1642227365038026218.post-65714559184656199312015-03-17T19:49:35.902-07:002015-03-17T19:49:35.902-07:00I was trying to play with how someone might read m...I was trying to play with how someone might read my words and which words I want the reader to stop and chew on a bit.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00154498473270334754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1642227365038026218.post-28883870381365600552015-03-17T19:48:54.780-07:002015-03-17T19:48:54.780-07:00Thank you. I need to do this more often but maybe...Thank you. I need to do this more often but maybe a better starting point is to read more poetry! I am going to go find your poem.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00154498473270334754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1642227365038026218.post-11322504200783705492015-03-17T11:41:25.530-07:002015-03-17T11:41:25.530-07:00Your metaphor is rolled throughout your piece. Ver...Your metaphor is rolled throughout your piece. Very unique. I like how you varied your phrasing and intensified the point by writing one word on each line in the middle.MaryHelenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13493683144411995592noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1642227365038026218.post-47226664425381238952015-03-16T16:55:25.875-07:002015-03-16T16:55:25.875-07:00Funny, I just wrote a poem slice, too - and I real...Funny, I just wrote a poem slice, too - and I really can't claim any knowledge about poetry! I was just trying something a little different. I really enjoyed your poem. I think yarn winding and unwinding makes a great metaphor for worry. I particularly like the way you phrased this: <br />The conversation lulled and<br />the unraveling began<br />again.<br />It is in the silence that worry hits me. Nicely done! Thanks for sharing!!Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08404917167112072640noreply@blogger.com